Sun in Flowers *Revised*

*MP*

The day has broken as a vase;
Its flowers strewn across the sky
As fire burns away the dark -
A blaze of colour born to die.

I have tidied up the meter so I think this version flows more smoothly.

Sun in Flowers

*MP*

The day has broken as a vase;
Its flowers strewn across the sky,
Lingering as fire burns away the dark -
A blaze of colour that was born only to die.

I realise this is a mixed metaphor, but what the heck!